I think this is a great challenge... flicked through my album and decided on this photo, which i love, but didn't love the page so much anymore :)
Below is the original Page.
Wow!! this looks great! Have you noticed you've angled elements like your first one? Is that your thing? Or was it subconcious. And you've journalled on your second one too which I think is an improvement (although I don't do enough of it )